You don't want to use because...so to match 因為。。。所以 in chinese, that's Chinglish.
Use rained to replace rain since it was in the past.
" I would stop the earth making it stay in July for ever": I would stop the earth and make it...
You used because, not because, but because in one full sentence. Too many "because".
"anywhere further " can be anywhere far away.
