The first sentence of your translation has grammatical problems. Not my rules, you may want to revisit "dangling phrases". But it is probably ok in your rules.
About the rules (your rules)
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• You sound bitter and hurt. End of discussion. -小釗- ♂ (0 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 01:46:59
• Are you delutional or what? -hammerheadshark- ♀ (206 bytes) () 08/03/2013 postreply 06:05:36