Another challenger?

來源: hammerheadshark 2013-07-18 22:34:23 [] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 本文已被閱讀: 次 (1104 bytes)
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This is going to be fun. I found it easier to work on someone else's effort.

* His

看花詩思發,對酒客愁輕。
Looking at flowers, poetic inspiration occurs;
Facing wine, the sorrow of a traveler becomes less.

* Yours

看花facing the flowers詩思發my poetic ispiration soars high
對酒drinking wine客愁輕the sorrow of this traveler turns lighter

* Standing on your shoulders, I have mine. 

看花詩思發,對酒客愁輕
Appreciating flowers inspires poetic thoughts;
Imbibing wine lightens a traveler's worries.

"愁" could be worry or agitation. If "worry" is too light, then making it plural will definitely tilt the scale. "Sorrow" is a bit heavy, don't you think? I am not a poet, just a thought.
 

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You are welcome! -SanGabriel- 給 SanGabriel 發送悄悄話 (212 bytes) () 07/19/2013 postreply 01:14:34

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