莎士比亞《Venus and Adonis》翻譯 - 150

Thus stands she in a trembling ecstasy;

Till, cheering up her senses all dismay'd,

She tells them 'tis a causeless fantasy,

And childish error, that they are afraid;

Bids them leave quaking, bids them fear no more:—

And with that word she spied the hunted boar,

 

戰栗暈極女神立； 

定神驅恐精氣振， 

非分之想須無忌， 

懼若小童太過甚；

莫喊莫叫莫驚慌：

此時野彘入目光。

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• 第三句: 恐懼如幻實不必 -淘金客- ♂ (143 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 17:26:35

• 好！隻是最後一句應該平聲押韻 -bmdn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 18:59:17

• 噢， 我一直沒明白ABABCC裏麵韻的選擇, 請解釋一下。 -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 20:30:13

• 你的韻沒問題，隻是降調 -bmdn- ♀ (12 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:45:46

• 恩，5，6句升，那1-4句呢？ -淘金客- ♂ (167 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 10:55:39

• "勸眾不必自憂擾" 怎麽樣，離原文意思靠近點。 -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 21:00:39

• 明白你的意思，這樣就不押韻了. -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 21:11:17

• : ) ), 押暈了吧還押， 聚大俠, the furtherest distance in the world, ... -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 04:02:10

• 咫尺千裏 -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 08:05:23

• 聚俠，看來你是serious! 依我這裏them指神誌senses,不是眾。？ -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:20:45

• 韻梅亞好， ：），和我一樣。 -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 20:35:15

• The furtherest distance in the world is between knowing what is -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 04:05:37

• 挺好 -bmdn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:47:18