回複:短故事練習

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回答: 短故事練習sportwoman2012-12-13 20:21:24
很有趣的小文。一點點小改動哈。我覺得寫東西時可以盡量避免i said, she said, he said,
有點單調重複的感覺;可以用不同的動詞來替代say/said。:)
另外英文裏對話前是用逗號,不是象中文一樣用冒號。哈哈,有點雞蛋裏挑骨頭哈。莫怪。

Today I complimented my friend that she looked like a million bucks,
And she replied,“Really? With all green wrinkles? ”I explained,“No,I mean you look
like a rich woman." she laughed and said, "Yes, I am loaded with money coming 
out of my ears." I told her, "If that's the case you should lower your voice 

 

to avoid any trouble." She started telling me her story when she lived in
Toronto decades ago. She was 19 back then and worked part time

 

 in a restaurant as a waitress while taking classes in a community college 

 

in downtown Toronto. She had to share an apartment with a friend. 

 

Before they moved into that apartment building, they didn't realize that  most people living in 

 

there were men who act like women, and they were all experts in girly 

 

stuff. So those men helped these two girls with make-up and buying nice clothes

 

at bargin prices. Ever since then, those two tomboys started to look like 

 

pretty rich and attractive young ladies, but the reality is that

 

they are still as broke as before, no matter how many guys are chasing after them.

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好建議!我忘了,本來也用stuff後來改了。美女你轉過身來了嗎?N日前看到你美麗的倩背影 :D -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 12/14/2012 postreply 02:21:29

哎,比起MM的年輕美麗充滿活力來,我是大媽啦。嘻嘻 -doyouknowme- 給 doyouknowme 發送悄悄話 doyouknowme 的博客首頁 (219 bytes) () 12/14/2012 postreply 06:55:22

Like it very much! You look great! :)) -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (215 bytes) () 12/14/2012 postreply 12:52:12

You're so sweet and kind. :)) -doyouknowme- 給 doyouknowme 發送悄悄話 doyouknowme 的博客首頁 (43 bytes) () 12/14/2012 postreply 13:41:43

me? a youthful spirit living in an old body :D -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 12/14/2012 postreply 18:49:03

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