Impressive writing!

來源: 非文學青年 於 2012-12-02 17:32:41 [] [博客] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 本文已被閱讀： 次 (592 bytes)
回答: All Men Are Created Equal 由 bmdn 於 2012-12-01 19:06:52

My favorite essay of yours so far.

I feel the last paragraph needs some elboration and refinement. It ended a little bit abrupt to me and I personally don't like referring Chinese people as "they". It sounded so aloof and a little bit judgemental. To be completely optimistic and more related to the theme of Lincoln, if I were writing it, I would say something about calling for a Chinese leader, a Chinese Lincoln, to shoulder the responsibility of reforming the Chinese government and resolving existing issues. It might sound cliche,but hopeful.

Happy holidays, DN!

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