以下是經過朋友文法修改的

The other day John had an appointment at 4:00pm to have  his car oil changed and remote battery replaced. It was a stifling hot day and it seemed to be raining soon. 4 00 pm is always the rush hour for this city, maybe also for other big cities all over the world?. It was about half an hour drive from his office to his dealer. So to avoid the peak hour traffic jam, he even left 10 minutes earlier and took the scenic route. It was so hot that he lowered his windows on both side and enjoyed the soft and balmy breeze. It started to rain half way through driving to his destination. The rain drops started to drip down to his windshield, so he pressed on the button to roll up the window

To his surprise, he even saw some hailstones floating in the wind mixed with rain, though they were not big enough to crack windows, the noise sounded sharper than rain when the car was hit by them. In no time, the water rushing into storm. The shower would lower the temperature of the city, he thought pleasantly as he reduced his speed and accelerated the speed of the windscreen wiper. John is a careful person. He is the oldest son in his family. He has 2 brothers and his parents passed away one after another during his university school years back in China. As a traditional Chinese he thinks that he is responsible for taking care of his brothers, so that is why he does everything with caution. He told him he would not able to afford the any failure caused by ignorance. So he doesn't want to get himself into any trouble that won't do any good to him and his family. He is his brothers' hero  although they have long since  grown up and got married a few years ago.

Rain was still dripping. He stopped at a red light, waiting. All of a sudden, he heard somebody's car squealing tires. It must be the slipperiness caused by rain. This reminded him of the first time he drove a car by himself. That was the first time he drove in snow, and that was a night after a class. Because he was so nervous driving down a slippery slope, he stepped on the brake pedal hard than he was supposed to so he lost control that his car almost skid right into the back of a bus. Damn it! What a close call!

John, although he always tries to be careful doing things, but, if you know him well enough, you could tell that he is sort of a person who has an one-track mind, maybe because he stayed in school for such a long time. He graduated with a PhD degree at the age his age of 29 after spending 4 years in labs and classrooms studying mechanical engineering. A few years ago, since he got his first car , he ran red lights for a few times and locked his car door twice while the engine was still running. He had learned some lesson since, anyway,

You may not believe that he got his first car for $200 from a friend of his friend. What a good bargain, eh? But the conditions of that car were not worth praising, that except the horn was not noisy, everywhere of that car seemed to be noisy like hell（我想說的是除了喇叭不響其他地方都響）what an old clunk! And his girlfriend then now his wife who has a quick temper kicked on it hard angrily when the engine died while driving. However, the lucky thing was he never have a car accident, not even a bender fender, although driving with is one-track mind and stinky driving skills. Lucky, huh?

Now it was green light, so John pulled himself back from the lala land and pulled himself together concentrating on heading to his destination.