回複：女兒參加比賽的作文

1. "I would say that it means the difference between people’s skin color, eye color… basically..."  Should it be "difference(s) between people's skin color(s) and eye color(s)", grammatically? or "differences among people's skin colors, eye colors...", logically?

2. "They might completely balance each other out,"  Would "They might be completely opposite" come out more natural?

3. "Diversities means the difference between looks and personality"  Sould it be "personalities" for consistency?

4. "If there was no such thing as diversity"  "were" is more approperiate.

5. "Diversity can also be the difference between jobs, and between religions"  Should be "among" instead of "between"? Again, either "a difference" or "differences" should be there for the sake of consistency.

6. "Their mom could have green eyes, and their dad could have brown eyes, but wears tinted contacts and pretends to have hazel eyes. "  Ambiguity. Who wears tinted contacts? Mom or dad?

7. "In a way, diversity is the borders that separate our identities from others, from our names, to our likes and dislikes."  Would "be our likes or dislikes" be more logical?

 

 

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• 鯊魚什麽時候給我們介紹一下你學英語的經驗唄？ -sportwoman- ♀ (70 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 06:58:36

• I don't have much experience -hammerheadshark- ♀ (239 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:24:10

• Although -sportwoman- ♀ (1731 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:40:27

• Can I borrow some? -hammerheadshark- ♀ (501 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:46:20

• 好啊 -sportwoman- ♀ (76 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:53:54

• It is raining ! -hammerheadshark- ♀ (210 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 12:26:51

• Nice to know -sportwoman- ♀ (2694 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 13:48:23

• 鯊魚兄博覽群書下筆如有神，是我學習的榜樣！ -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:47:52

• 是我們大家學習的榜樣！ -圈外閑人- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:00:42

• 我要改口稱鯊魚老師了，他人是真好，我作業沒交出來都沒有被罰。 -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:09:45

• 老師手下留情！ -圈外閑人- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 20:42:31

• 學習了，鯊魚老師！ -圈外閑人- ♀ (63 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:00:02

• Come on,you over-estimated me. Besides, I could be wrong. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 21:39:34

• 而且還那麽謙虛，鯊魚老師就是好。 -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/02/2012 postreply 04:23:41