語調很不錯！讀得很流暢！小磚渣奉上。

建議你這次專門學習一下元音/ou/（這個音標我標的不對。就是stone的o的發音。）（漢語拚音類似/偶/）的發音。

也練和短音/u/的音。（as in woods）

你的/ei/的發音進步非常大！

If You Hold My Hand

Oakey's mom opened the front door.(查查字典，要把/奧/和/r/分開讀。）

 "Come on, Oakey. Let's go outside and explore."
But Oakey wasn't really sure. He was only small, and the world looked big and scary.
"Only if you promise（短音i，似乎你讀成長音i的縮短的音了。） to hold my hand," said Oakey.
"This looks like a great place to play. Should we take a look? What do you say（這次你的/ei/的發音都很好，這個似乎沒到位，聽著像sing的音）?" asked Oakey's mom.
"Only if you promise to hold my hand," said Oakey.
And Oakey did it.
"This slide looks like fun.（這個音你發的不準，查查字典的發音，把你的音錄出來同時比較） Would you likt to try?" asked Oakey's mom.
I'm only samll," said Oakey. "I don't know if I could climb that high-unless you hold my hand."
And Oakey did it! "Wheee! Did you see me?" he cried.
"We'll take a short cut through （長音u，你的沒到位）the woods," said Oakey's mom.
"I'm not sure if we should," said Oakey. "It looks dark in there. Well I suppose we could-will you hold my hand?"
And Oakey did it! " Boo! I scared you!" he cried.
Deep in the woods（短音u，應該發出來聽著像/唔額/的音，你發的是長音u的音。你的look的短音u發的很好）, Oakey found a stream, shaded by beautiful tall trees.
"Stepping stones（發/ou/時，嘴巴是噘出來而且是圓的）, look!" said Oakey's mom. " Do you think you could jump across these?"（應該是長音i，你發的長音不夠長。）
"Maybe," said Oakey. "I just need you to hold my hand, please."
And Oakey did it!
Beyond the woods（同上）, Oakey and his mom ran up the hill, and all the way down to the ocean.
"Come on, Oakey," called his mom. "Would you like to wade in the ocean with me?" But the ocean looked big, and he was only small.
Suddenly, Oakey knew that didn't matter at all.
He turned to his mom and smiled（你的l卷舌了，沒有r，所以不應該卷舌。） ..."I can do anything if you hold my hand," he said.

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