緊急求助:申請一個award,英語寫不太好. 裏邊是我寫的:

Dear （不知道該寫什麽，是研究生辦公室）：

I am sincerely applying for the Award for Excellent Study.  This award will benefit me greatly by lightening my burden on finance and assist me in devoting myself to studying.  If my application is granted, I will use this award to pay tuition for the coming term and pay rent and basic living expenses.

就會寫這麽多了，怎麽能顯得很真誠，我很需要這錢的樣子啊？要求是寫上用途。

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• 我覺得你要多寫點你為什麽QUALIFY/DESERVE這個AWARD，而不是一味強調 -cha-cha- ♀ (77 bytes) () 11/29/2011 postreply 19:44:01

• 回複：我覺得你要多寫點你為什麽QUALIFY/DESERVE這個AWARD，而不是一味強調 -rockcurrent- ♂ (378 bytes) () 11/29/2011 postreply 20:17:23

• 謝謝二位~~ -vv高- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/30/2011 postreply 05:32:41