There are several sentences that are too long (especially in the last two paragraphs, maybe you need to re-write them a little bit.
- internet -> Internet or the Internet
- I enjoy and benefit from the online forums the most.
- 老相好 that I met first and then we became my good friends through the Iinternet. (grammar) - describe my impressions on (of) them ( "of" is better than "on") - what I enjoy most, what I enjoy the most - Other than that, some personal - Other than those, some personal - exiting (exciting) moments of the growth and improvement development of - with tears and laughters - with tears and laughter -As the urge and enthusiasm to exchange information with my online mommy fellows (?) have been are fading away, I started to spending more time in self-improvement. - I finally got settled with the idea of improving my English first, and no matter what, to removing the language barriers as much as I can (grammar) - obsessed by anything -> obsessed with anything - I have to remind myself to avoid -> I have to remind myself of avoiding
- being stuck on cover letters -> I feel that this is not a good expression, but not sure how to change it - It is very sad that my English skills had regressed to a stage that I could not finish a sentence without mistakes after having stayed at home without practicing very often for three years -> this sentence is too long and needs to be broken down, especially there are two "without" in the sentence.
