That's right. More proofread is absolutely needed, wording, stru

let's do an execise of removing the sentences started by capital I.

- Original:

In addition, I am a good team player. Last, I have proven track records with B Company. This position ties perfectly with my long term career goal. I am always looking for a position which especially utilizes my strengths, analytical skill and multi-tasking skill.

- Revision:

My track record in Company B shows that I am team player. The past experience in B is most joyfull in my career. This position is the perfect place where I could contribute my analytical, multi-tasking, blahblahblah skills