天澤英語園
落霞與孤鶩齊飛，秋水共長天一色 一句最有魅力的中國古詩. 令人心曠神怡,寧靜致遠.
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If I had my life to live over...I would have talked less and listened more.
如果我的生命有輪回......我會寡言多聞。
I would have invited friends over to dinner even if the carpet was strained and the sofa faded.
我會邀請朋友們來家裏夜宵，即使這樣會弄髒了地毯，使沙發的顏色淡去也再所不惜。
I would have taken the time to listen to my grandfather ramble about his youth.
我會抽出時間來聽祖父漫談他的青澀年華。
I would never have insisted the car windows be rolled up on a summer day because my hair had just been teased and sprayed.
我再不會在那個炎熱的夏天也執意搖起車窗，因為我那剛剛染了色而被取笑的頭發。
I would have burned the pink candle sculpted like a rose before it melted in storage.
我會將雕刻成玫瑰模樣的粉色蠟燭在它即將熔化在記憶之前點燃。
I would have sat on the lawn with my children and not worried about grass stains.
我會和我的孩子們圍坐在青青草坪，而再不去管它們會被壓損或是怎樣。
I would have cried and laughed less while watching television-and more while watching life.
我會把我的歡笑和淚水更多的獻給生活而不是電視劇。
I would have gone to bed when I was sick instead of pretending the earth would go into a holding patter if I were not there for the day.
我會在自己生病是時候躺在床上休息，而不是重複著地球沒有我就難以運轉的“謊言”。
I would never have bought anything just because it was practical,would not show soil or was guaranteed to last a lifetime.
我將不會因為某件事情既成事實就接受相信，也將不會顯露墮落並保證一生都不會。
There would have been more I love yous ... more I'm sorrys...but mostly, given another shots at life, I would seize every minute... look at it and really see it...live it...and never give it back.
來生將會有更多的“我愛你”...... 更多的“對不起”...... 而更重要的是，我將會在來生做一些此生不曾有過的嚐試，我會抓住每時每刻...... 審視生命......真正的去了解生命......感受生命......永不放棄。
(ZT)
天澤園你好，
這組句子很好，譯得也不錯。隻是有個別詞句似乎還有待於精雕細刻，有些我個人覺得似乎不太準確，我把自己有看法的詞語都挑出來用星號標注，並寫出了自己的看法。
此外，我認為這些話屬於警句或諺語之類，恐怕不宜直譯，否則就失去了應有的雋永韻味。似乎可以用漢語中現成的成語、俗語、俚語等直接替換。當然這要很費腦筋去挑選漢語的對應語。我現在一時還想不好。
以上意見都沒有進過深思熟慮，隻是粗略想法，因此不一定對，僅供參考。說得不對，以你的為準。
宋德利
附錄：
I would have invited friends over to dinner even if the carpet was strained and the sofa faded.
我會邀請朋友們來家裏夜宵，即使這樣會弄髒了地毯，使沙發的顏色淡去也再所不惜。
I would have taken the time to listen to my grandfather ramble about his youth.
我會抽出時間來聽祖父漫談他的青澀年華。
I would never have insisted the car windows be rolled up on a summer day because my hair had just been teased and sprayed.
我再不會在那個炎熱的夏天也執意搖起車窗，因為我那剛剛染了色而被取笑的頭發。
*tease梳理，spray噴（發膠）。
*你那個“因為”後麵沒有謂語，因此算是詞組。不如放到句子裏麵。可譯成：我決不會因為剛剛梳理過頭發和噴過發膠就在夏日裏將車窗搖起。
I would have burned the pink candle sculpted like a rose before it melted in storage.
我會將雕刻成玫瑰模樣的粉色蠟燭在它即將熔化在記憶之前點燃。
*模樣，人才說模樣，物件似乎應說形狀。因此可說“雕刻成玫瑰狀的粉色蠟燭”。
*熔化，是具象化的詞，專指高溫使固體液化。此處應用“融化”。不如說：融入記憶之前點燃。
I would have sat on the lawn with my children and not worried about grass stains.
我會和我的孩子們圍坐在青青草坪，而再不去管它們會被壓損或是怎樣。
*grass stains，指因坐在草地上，褲子被草色弄髒而出現色痕。是指隻願意和孩子們坐在草地上，也不管衣物被草色染髒。
I would have gone to bed when I was sick instead of pretending the earth would go into a holding patter if I were not there for the day.
我會在自己生病是時候躺在床上休息，而不是重複著地球沒有我就難以運轉的“謊言”。
*patter，指荒謬言論，可說是“無稽之談”，似非指“謊言”。
I would never have bought anything just because it was practical,would not show soil or was guaranteed to last a lifetime.
我將不會因為某件事情既成事實就接受相信，也將不會顯露墮落並保證一生都不會。
*Practical，實用性。是說買東西不看是否有實用價值，比如有時光是因為喜歡等。
There would have been more I love yous ... more I'm sorrys...but mostly, given another shots at life, I would seize every minute... look at it and really see it...live it...and never give it back.
來生將會有更多的“我愛你”...... 更多的“對不起”...... 而更重要的是，我將會在來生做一些此生不曾有過的嚐試，我會抓住每時每刻...... 審視生命......真正的去了解生命......感受生命......永不放棄。
*Shots，中肯的話，一針見血的評語。指：說得最多的則是針對生活而言中肯話語， 即“箴言”。言外之意，“愛你”、“對不起”之類是空話，隻有箴言才中肯有益。
如果我的生命有輪回......我會寡言多聞。
I would have invited friends over to dinner even if the carpet was strained and the sofa faded.
我會邀請朋友們來家裏夜宵，即使這樣會弄髒了地毯，使沙發的顏色淡去也再所不惜。
I would have taken the time to listen to my grandfather ramble about his youth.
我會抽出時間來聽祖父漫談他的青澀年華。
I would never have insisted the car windows be rolled up on a summer day because my hair had just been teased and sprayed.
我再不會在那個炎熱的夏天也執意搖起車窗，因為我那剛剛染了色而被取笑的頭發。
I would have burned the pink candle sculpted like a rose before it melted in storage.
我會將雕刻成玫瑰模樣的粉色蠟燭在它即將熔化在記憶之前點燃。
I would have sat on the lawn with my children and not worried about grass stains.
我會和我的孩子們圍坐在青青草坪，而再不去管它們會被壓損或是怎樣。
I would have cried and laughed less while watching television-and more while watching life.
我會把我的歡笑和淚水更多的獻給生活而不是電視劇。
I would have gone to bed when I was sick instead of pretending the earth would go into a holding patter if I were not there for the day.
我會在自己生病是時候躺在床上休息，而不是重複著地球沒有我就難以運轉的“謊言”。
I would never have bought anything just because it was practical,would not show soil or was guaranteed to last a lifetime.
我將不會因為某件事情既成事實就接受相信，也將不會顯露墮落並保證一生都不會。
There would have been more I love yous ... more I'm sorrys...but mostly, given another shots at life, I would seize every minute... look at it and really see it...live it...and never give it back.
來生將會有更多的“我愛你”...... 更多的“對不起”...... 而更重要的是，我將會在來生做一些此生不曾有過的嚐試，我會抓住每時每刻...... 審視生命......真正的去了解生命......感受生命......永不放棄。
(ZT)
天澤園你好，
這組句子很好，譯得也不錯。隻是有個別詞句似乎還有待於精雕細刻，有些我個人覺得似乎不太準確，我把自己有看法的詞語都挑出來用星號標注，並寫出了自己的看法。
此外，我認為這些話屬於警句或諺語之類，恐怕不宜直譯，否則就失去了應有的雋永韻味。似乎可以用漢語中現成的成語、俗語、俚語等直接替換。當然這要很費腦筋去挑選漢語的對應語。我現在一時還想不好。
以上意見都沒有進過深思熟慮，隻是粗略想法，因此不一定對，僅供參考。說得不對，以你的為準。
宋德利
附錄：
I would have invited friends over to dinner even if the carpet was strained and the sofa faded.
我會邀請朋友們來家裏夜宵，即使這樣會弄髒了地毯，使沙發的顏色淡去也再所不惜。
I would have taken the time to listen to my grandfather ramble about his youth.
我會抽出時間來聽祖父漫談他的青澀年華。
I would never have insisted the car windows be rolled up on a summer day because my hair had just been teased and sprayed.
我再不會在那個炎熱的夏天也執意搖起車窗，因為我那剛剛染了色而被取笑的頭發。
*tease梳理，spray噴（發膠）。
*你那個“因為”後麵沒有謂語，因此算是詞組。不如放到句子裏麵。可譯成：我決不會因為剛剛梳理過頭發和噴過發膠就在夏日裏將車窗搖起。
I would have burned the pink candle sculpted like a rose before it melted in storage.
我會將雕刻成玫瑰模樣的粉色蠟燭在它即將熔化在記憶之前點燃。
*模樣，人才說模樣，物件似乎應說形狀。因此可說“雕刻成玫瑰狀的粉色蠟燭”。
*熔化，是具象化的詞，專指高溫使固體液化。此處應用“融化”。不如說：融入記憶之前點燃。
I would have sat on the lawn with my children and not worried about grass stains.
我會和我的孩子們圍坐在青青草坪，而再不去管它們會被壓損或是怎樣。
*grass stains，指因坐在草地上，褲子被草色弄髒而出現色痕。是指隻願意和孩子們坐在草地上，也不管衣物被草色染髒。
I would have gone to bed when I was sick instead of pretending the earth would go into a holding patter if I were not there for the day.
我會在自己生病是時候躺在床上休息，而不是重複著地球沒有我就難以運轉的“謊言”。
*patter，指荒謬言論，可說是“無稽之談”，似非指“謊言”。
I would never have bought anything just because it was practical,would not show soil or was guaranteed to last a lifetime.
我將不會因為某件事情既成事實就接受相信，也將不會顯露墮落並保證一生都不會。
*Practical，實用性。是說買東西不看是否有實用價值，比如有時光是因為喜歡等。
There would have been more I love yous ... more I'm sorrys...but mostly, given another shots at life, I would seize every minute... look at it and really see it...live it...and never give it back.
來生將會有更多的“我愛你”...... 更多的“對不起”...... 而更重要的是，我將會在來生做一些此生不曾有過的嚐試，我會抓住每時每刻...... 審視生命......真正的去了解生命......感受生命......永不放棄。
*Shots，中肯的話，一針見血的評語。指：說得最多的則是針對生活而言中肯話語， 即“箴言”。言外之意，“愛你”、“對不起”之類是空話，隻有箴言才中肯有益。
Thanks for saying so :-)!