原詩是拉丁文，這是英文的譯版。感覺您沒有譯出它的元神。

CONCERT IN THE GARDEN
Octavio Paz

It rained.
The hour is an immense eye.
Inside it, we come and go like reflections.
The river of music
enters my blood.
If I say body, it answers wind.
If I say earth, it answers where?

The world, a double blossom, opens:
sadness of having come,
joy of being here.

I wander, lost in my own center.

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