我寫的時候, 有點 folk lore 的感覺, 想著農村小夥, 所以韻壓的像順口溜了。
調整句子位置, 感覺好些嗎? 謝謝。
Miles of smile
I am trekking the last mile
to see my love’s smile.
Her smiles inspire
my journey through miles of mire.
I bring her a plain tile
inscribed with her beautiful smile.
My love for you, please don’t inquire,
for it will never expire.