你的感覺有道理

我寫的時候， 有點 folk lore 的感覺， 想著農村小夥， 所以韻壓的像順口溜了。 

調整句子位置， 感覺好些嗎？ 謝謝。 

Miles of smile

 

I am trekking the last mile

to see my love’s smile.

Her smiles inspire

my journey through miles of mire.

I bring her a plain tile

inscribed with her beautiful smile.

My love for you, please don’t inquire,

for it will never expire.