初識新友,冒昧交流:
1.寫粽不言粽更好,頸聯下句中的粽字能否還有更好的替換?
2.尾聯胸臆到位,給力!惟上句平仄微暇。汨羅無可替換,曆字或有平聲可救?以期音律完整。
汨羅千載悲魂祭,猶頌離騷萬古長。
俺是經常古平仄不清,謬見之處,望天堂君一笑曬之~~
總之,喜歡此律,是以囉嗦~~
初識新友,冒昧交流:
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