章節名都起得很好。建議，人物說話的時候適當加一些動作吧，不必每句都加。

我曾經見人說過：Keep your characters moving as they talk. Hardly anyone speaks without moving. We use our hands. We shuffle our feet. We walk around, pick up items, keep working or watching television. If you keep your characters moving and describe their actions and movements, their dialogue seems more natural and keeps your reader interested in what is being said. ~ Othello Bach

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• 謝謝高妹的好建議！忽然覺得我這裏“斯是陋室.....談笑有鴻儒，往來無白丁”。和大家的互動受益匪淺！ -可能成功的P- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 15:39:42

• 我剛才去修改了接下來的幾集，的確感覺好一些！多謝！ -可能成功的P- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 17:37:11

• 還有，能否對人物的外貌神態多一點描寫。讀者腦補容易補錯！ -AlexisMom- ♀ (98 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 17:34:36

• 喔，是嗎？小說開頭有細致的描述。看來要在故事中有幾次穿插的描述，才會更好地體現人物形象。多謝你！下一稿好好修改。下麵的也盡量完善 -可能成功的P- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 17:39:33

• 嗯，複習了下，是有。不過１００多章裏，著墨確實不多，感覺是白描手法。 -AlexisMom- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 21:38:17

• 哈哈哈，以後給個重彩：） -可能成功的P- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/02/2022 postreply 22:14:58