Some Advice to the Author.

來源: taian12 2019-10-01 14:20:25 [] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 本文已被閱讀: 次 (1440 bytes)
回答: 家有愛寫作的娃媽來報道葡萄團子媽2019-08-11 23:25:11

This story had a somewhat interesting concept, with the idea of a mark of the diamond that killed. I do think that this story is very original. I advise the author of the story to write with more description, like "as the blood slowly crept across the floor..." to make the story more intresting.  Also, if this is a horror story, then I say, you have failed in making me scared at all. (And I am a very easily frightened person.) Like I said, write with more description so it'll be easier for the reader to invison it. On another point, the story is lacking any figurative speech. I'd put some smilies, if I were you.

But in all, this story wasn't so bad. Keep on writing! 

-(I'm a 12 year old, just like you, unnamed author. So no excuses. And don't tell me I sound like a teacher.)

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