初學寫詞：減字木蘭花（讀《白香詞譜》仿押王安國韻)

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減字木蘭花 （紅燈停處邂風情）　彩雲舒
馬龍車水，燈點絳唇緋撩起。對目銷魂，歡曲雙車巧互聞。
眉梢送語，惹多少春風過去。綠喚車揚，悅笑風流又何妨？

減字木蘭花 （春情） - [宋] 王安國
畫橋流水，雨濕落紅飛不起。月破黃昏，簾裏餘香馬上聞。
徘徊不語，今夜夢魂何處去。不似垂楊，猶解飛花入洞房。

[紅燈邂風情]題解：上個周五下班驅車回家路上，一抹夕陽，晚風拂煦，想到周末不上班了，有種說不出來的輕狂，車裏的音樂頻道傳來Celine Dion的《Drove All Night》那首我百聽不厭的情歌，我隨聲唱著，歌聲讓我快活得像隻飛鳥兒，好個爽快！正巧紅燈停下，從旁邊一輛敞篷車裏也傳出同我車裏相同頻道的歌，那車上的男子和我不由互相對視，好個英俊的男子。說也好怪啊，我倆不約而同地都摘下墨鏡，他金發藍眼，風情地對我一擠眼睛，我呢，正唱到興頭處，也不由地飛給他個媚眼，接著一個飛吻過來。。。綠燈一換，我笑著一踩油門，車飛也似地向前方駛去，風舞弄著我的長發。。。

注1：白香詞譜中《減字木蘭花》的詞律：
仄平平△ 仄仄仄平平仄△ 仄仄平○ 平仄平平仄仄○
平平仄▲ 平平仄平平仄▲ 仄仄平● 平仄平平仄仄●
(平為平可仄，仄為仄可平，△和▲為仄韻，○和●為平韻)

注2：《減字木蘭花》，又名《減蘭》、《天下樂令》、《木蘭香》等。雙調小令。四十四字，每兩句話一轉韻，共四仄韻，四平韻。

注3：平仄按照現代漢語的四聲發音而定，第一聲、第二聲為平聲；第三聲、第四聲為仄聲。

注4：下麵是我幾年前在走廊和歌壇曾發過的歌貼:Celine Dion演唱的《IDrove All Night》

I Drive All Night

I had to escape
The city was sticky and cruel
Maybe I should have called you first
But I was dying to get to you
I was dreaming while I drove
The long straight road ahead, uh, huh

Could taste your sweet kisses
Your arms open wide
This fever for you is just burning me up inside

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep
To make love to you
Is that alright
I drove all night

What in this world
Keeps us from falling apart
No matter where I go I hear
The beating of our one heart
I think about you
When the night is cold and dark
No one can move me
The way that you do
Nothing erases this feeling between me and you

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep
To make love to you
Is that alright
I drove all night

Could taste your sweet kisses
Your arms open wide
This fever for you is just burning me up inside

I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Is that alright

I drove all night
I drove all night to get to you
Is that alright
I drove all night
Crept in your room
Woke you from your sleep