You can't tell the person what to do. Try this one:

來源: 廢話多多 於 2014-07-31 13:46:39 [] [博客] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 閱讀數 : (821 bytes)
回答: simplified: 由 問訊 於 2014-07-31 13:22:46

Dear Mr./Ms. Last Name:

It was a pleasure to talk to you today about the 1234 position at the ABCD company. The job seems to be a perfect match for my abilities and interests.

In additiong to my technical skills,  I will bring to the position strong communication skills...(三個優點）

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I am looking forward to meeting you in person and hope to hear from you soon.

Again, thank you very much for your time and for your consideration.

Sincerely Yours,

Your Name
Email Address
Address
Phone Number

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• Thanks, this is much better, but I sent the simplified version a -問訊- ♀ 給 問訊 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 14:13:50

• 不好意思的說一句，你的version用詞太硬了，我若收到這樣的email不會喜歡。 -arcsigh- ♀ 給 arcsigh 發送悄悄話 (48 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:12:18

• 沒辦法，已經寄出去了，聽天由命吧。 -問訊- ♀ 給 問訊 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:14:52

• 看來真是不寫還好些。。。 -問訊- ♀ 給 問訊 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:18:48

• 嗬嗬，沒事啦。對方理解的。你真付合他們的標準他們也不會因為一封email而改變主意。 -arcsigh- ♀ 給 arcsigh 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:25:40

• 好吧，謝謝。 -問訊- ♀ 給 問訊 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:32:59

• 而且不應該用chance而應用opportunity 一詞。 -arcsigh- ♀ 給 arcsigh 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:16:47

• 對，太不專業了，噢！ -問訊- ♀ 給 問訊 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:17:39

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