To Shadow of Love （2-22-07） (圖)

作品選自《作舟博克》鳴謝

To Shadow of Love (2-22-07)

 

淪陷的那天

你發給我一個陰性的信號

在蘆葦的背麵

那窈窕淑女散落的指甲

被塗成成熟的顏色

 

你升向我

用旗幟一樣的質感

否定我過度的夢想

而我脆弱的神經

還留在蘆葦叢裏

 

我用柔軟去想象你

被碰得頭破血流

[舞曼西樓]

It's so interesting you can predict what you will fell after you look at the pic. Although we can have slightly deferent feelings (such as I felt nervous and yy felt restless), but these feelings are in the same line.
So art is no kidding! And is so important to be truthful to yourself.
Thanks

[影雲]

"restless" is what i feel . . .:)

[~&~]

i can sense the "nervous" quality in your poem .... abtract stuff is best for "nervous stuff"..... :)

[舞曼西樓]

Agreed about the nail part. Get rid of the 窈窕淑女

This picture’s color, roughness and smoothness, her body position give me “陰性", rigid and dream-like dark feeling. When I wrote the poem, I felt nerves.

Thanks

[~&~]

陰性的[信號]???

在蘆葦的背麵

那窈窕淑女散落的指甲
.....


“窈窕淑女”這個詞被人爛用了，太俗了已經。

不如用‘她脫落的指甲’[？？]


but the poem kinda matches the image's mood ....

cheers!