I am Mei Ling (1)已全部更新（續）

在過去的幾周裏，我和女兒一起對I am Mei Ling (1)又進行了多次的修改。下麵是幾處修改的例子。

(131) (old)

He impatiently moved.

He shouted at me, Mei Ling,

“Go back to the basement.

Please don’t touch anything!”

(131) (new)

He loudly shouted at me.

His voice quivered in the air.

“Don’t touchanything, little girl!

Go back to the basement. Stay there!”
對anything和Ling來壓韻進行了修改。我喜歡修改後的第二句。

(137) (old)

It took a long, long time

For a car to pass by.

It took even longer

For a person to walk by.

(137) (new)

It took a long time for a car

To pass by in front of me.

I silently counted them,

One… two… three…

我其實挺喜歡pass by和walk by的，但我女兒不同意，說是不能用相同的字。她很喜歡修改後的One… two… three…，她說很cute。

(204) (old)

Then, he made a funny face.

My mom couldn’t help laughing,

“The bellybutton snowwoman

Is the best in the world, Mei Ling.”

(204) (new)

I quickly walked to my dad and

Wildly played with his hair on his head.

“The bellybutton snowwoman is

The best in the world, Mei Ling,” he said.

對laughing和Ling來壓韻進行了修改。Mei Ling跑去弄亂爸爸的頭發，這樣寫顯得她和爸爸很親密，她是Daddy’s girl。這句話“The bellybuttonsnowwoman is the best in the world, Mei Ling,”原是媽媽說的，現改給是爸爸說的，更合情理。

(217) (old)

Together, Mom, Dad and I

Entered a tall building.

The building looked very good.

It was very exciting.

(217) (new)

In front of a tall building,

Mom, Dad and I gladly stood.

It was very exciting.

The building lookedvery good.
building 和exciting不完全壓韻，進行了修改。