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寫兒童故事幾年，終於鼓起勇氣給大家看，請您多提寶貴意見。
我的Love That Cat又重新進行了修改，我已將最新版本貼出。
Love That Cat在一年前寫成，可以說已經修改了無數遍，改的過程對於我來說就象是鐵杵磨繡花針，但每次，改好了幾個句子哪怕是幾個字都十分高興。
請看我最近的一次修改。
A．我把我的故事給一些人看過，有人提出funny和she不壓韻，但也有人說它們壓韻。壓韻與否取決於讀者funny一詞的念法，如果ny念的重而長就壓韻，短而輕就不壓韻。為改此處，我累死了不少腦細胞，因為與funny 壓韻的詞很少，隻有bunny，sunny幾個。最後，我改成下麵新的句子，我很得意，覺得改得很巧妙。
(11) (old)
This Canadian cat
Looked a little funny.
Her nose was black and white.
She’s a clown, isn’t she?
(11) (new)
This Canadian cat
Looked so funny to me.
Her nose was black and white.
She’s a clown, isn’t she?
B． 原來為保證四句的音節數都是6，將My dad made a good joke to her一句斷開，To her放入了第四句中。現在新的句子解決了這個問題。
(12) (old)
One of her legs was black
And three of them were white.
My dad made a good joke
To her, with a delight.
(12) (new)
One of her legs was black
And three of them were white.
Dad made a joke to her.
Mimi is a delight.
C． 我不喜歡That, I was worried about.這句，我一直想改，這次，終於改好了。
(17) (old)
During the very first day,
I didn’t see her come out.
Was she hungry or thirsty?
That, I was worried about.
(17) (new)
During the very first day,
I didn’t see my new cat.
Was she hungry or thirsty?
I was worried about that.
D． 這個verse的修改是此次修改中的糾錯修改。原來黑白貓Mimi的眼睛是light ocean blue，眼仁是black。我在一次讀的時候突然覺得吃不準，黑白貓的眼睛能否是是light ocean blue？我查了書，在網上看了很多圖片，沒有發現黑白貓的眼睛是藍的，白貓才有藍的，所以，我進行了修改。
(54) (old)
Like beautiful round marbles,
Mimi’s two eyes always shine.
They were light ocean blue but
The pupils were black like mine.
(54) (new)
Like beautiful round marbles,
Mimi’s two eyes always shine.
They were golden yellow but
The pupils were black like mine.
給你兩次留言，不知道你有沒有看見——我今天費了不少力才找到留言簿。怕你沒有看到留言，再次去拷貝了昨天的留言貼在下麵——
好久沒見，問你好！
我一直以為你可以登陸五味，隻是沒有空上網。最近才從physician那知道你曾試過，但是上不去。前晚，Physician，還有夏涼、勤勞、老禿筆等很多人為此又去呼籲。上官昨天專門出來解釋：你沒有被封。也許，你沒能登陸是技術問題。
我不知道你是否還願意去試試？是否仍願意回五味齋？這次風波可能很影響你的心情，偶爾齋裏也有某些人並不好玩，但那裏還是有很多有趣的人，你也有很多朋友在，希望你有空的話會願意來。如果還是登陸不了，請一定給我或其他朋友留言。大家真的都很關心你！
很對不起，我沒有等到你的登錄結果就回去了。我原以為沒有問題的，畢竟萱萱草、穿牆屁都解封了。勤勞之前專門用E問過上官、為我們請過願。看過你那篇五味被封記，知道你不會怪罪我，而且這些天也沒有來講登陸失敗的事，也是為了不幹擾我（們）。很謝謝你的支持！更期待大家的相會。