後現代詩太難寫了還是試試寫兒歌 DUST & RUST

Dust and rust

You can’t see my smile, you said,
Your vision is blurred by dust.
Neither can I see your smile, I said,
So is my vision blurred by dust.
In our eyes, what made dust spread?
A wise man answered,
In your hearts, it’s called distrust.

You can’t feel my heart, you said,
Your touch is calloused by rust.
Neither can I feel your heart, I said,
So is my touch calloused by rust.
On our fingers, what made rust spread?
A wise man answered,
In your hearts, it’s called distrust.

所有跟帖： 

• 傷心地發現我不是wise man~~~ -雪晶- ♀ (0 bytes) () 12/14/2020 postreply 22:31:50

• 不要對自己期待太高 -stonebench- ♂ (230 bytes) () 12/14/2020 postreply 23:28:40

• 不敢啊~~~ -雪晶- ♀ (269 bytes) () 12/15/2020 postreply 11:10:25

• 謝謝！ -stonebench- ♂ (213 bytes) () 12/15/2020 postreply 12:36:37

• 我快被繞進去了，適合睡前看 -何仙姑- ♀ (177 bytes) () 12/15/2020 postreply 16:07:52