“養”字比“蓄”好,有動感且帶情感,杜甫有“落日邀雙鳥,晴天養片雲”。若必須用入聲字,建議選“掬”或更有動感和情感。另外,“雪有饞情結,庭中徑直深”,轉折幅度或太大,沒有解釋,讀起來有點轉不過彎。
“養”字比“蓄”好,有動感且帶情感,杜甫有“落日邀雙鳥,晴天養片雲”。若必須用入聲字,建議選“掬”或更有動感和情感。另外,“雪有饞情結,庭中徑直深”,轉折幅度或太大,沒有解釋,讀起來有點轉不過彎。
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感謝清泉水先生交流,讓我受益匪淺。
-惜也-
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