【七律】雪後

【七律】雪後

 

幽居廣漠日漫漫，夢境無垠素毯寬。

雪色南侵原野寂，陽春冬伏曙天寒。

窗前剪影思時淡，雪後江山醉裏看。

霙落人間頭易白，飛天入地覓長安。

 

After Snow

 

Living in the vast desert, the days are long.

After snowing, the dreamland

is boundless, under a white blank

that extends beyond my sight.

 

The snow invades the south.

The wilderness is silent.

The spring is still hibernating.

The morning sky is chilling.

 

In front of the window your silhouette

is missing when I miss you.

The mountains and rivers

in the snow make me drunk.

 

My head turns white faster

when it's snowing.

It hasn't been easy to go up and down,

searching for lasting peace.

 

(© Feb. 17, 2024, godog)

 

 

 

 

 

 

所有跟帖： 

• 窗前剪影思時淡，雪後江山醉裏看。 -yongshi99- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/17/2024 postreply 16:27:50

• 請問，出句可以入韻嗎？哪怕是仄聲韻。 -油翁- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/18/2024 postreply 13:31:04

• 你為啥問我？看看人家九兄。。。 -yongshi99- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/19/2024 postreply 08:03:27

• 根據惜也老師說的，除了第一聯，出句要盡量避免用跟韻腳同韻母的字 -godog- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/21/2024 postreply 20:00:37

• 雪後江山醉裏看。~~~ -山水蒼茫- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/17/2024 postreply 17:04:48

• 聯聯精彩，好律欣賞，周日愉快： -方外居士- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/18/2024 postreply 08:35:20

• 不經意間，就引出千古名句 -冠軍侯- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/18/2024 postreply 21:26:09

• 侯兄謬讚了 -godog- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/21/2024 postreply 20:01:14

• 淡字撞韻。 -白九- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/19/2024 postreply 05:34:54

• 學習了！ -yongshi99- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/19/2024 postreply 08:10:21

• 因為這個原因，考慮過用杳、遁等字，想來想去，還是覺得意境不如淡字好，就還是用了淡 -godog- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/21/2024 postreply 20:03:31