疏淡味似不切。“叮泠”有點難解“。
小渴偏宜酒,疏狂且忘形 - 疏野好聯!施然駐杖停 - 動作似太多,意象有點擠。“憑” - “賴”意近。“滌”字或重,與全詩
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• 多謝清泉兄斧正。丁泠就是溪水聲。 -pinggh- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/06/2018 postreply 13:30:33
• 施然駐杖停,可以改成施然一杖停 -pinggh- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/06/2018 postreply 13:33:59
• 多謝清泉兄斧正。丁泠就是溪水聲。 -pinggh- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/06/2018 postreply 13:30:33
• 施然駐杖停,可以改成施然一杖停 -pinggh- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/06/2018 postreply 13:33:59
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