[七律] 森林公園尋春

[七律]  森林公園尋春 ( 跟韻 Momo 君)

  April 2, 2017,  Ann Arbor, MI
文 / Meander,

獨踏幽隅過水東, 參天古樹肆橫空。
凶威蒼隼雲梢蕩, 怯陣鬆鼯澗穀逢。
冉冉鵝黃縈細蔓, 雍雍桃色染溪篷。
誰言林壑春痕淺, 柔柳呼來河畔風。

 

 

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• 讚賞，學習。問好 -Willie_USA- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/04/2017 postreply 16:38:29

• 賞讚M兄好律！個見四個重字開頭略顯單調。末句河畔風若變成動賓或更有活氣！ -作業本- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 05:32:40

• 啊哦，中間兩聯疊字位置還未調整？ -momo_sharon- ♀ (24 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 06:20:19

• ~~ Thanks for invaluable comments, I'll update after work today -Meander001- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 06:57:16

• ~~ Could please take one more look for having updated according -Meander001- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 12:01:22

• ~~Having updated according to 作業兄, and Momo 君's comment. -Meander001- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 12:03:36

• 哈哈，活動得很！！！膽怯一句大笑！！ -作業本- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 13:02:34

• Updated again, You see, in the last inset Picture, there is Hawk -Meander001- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 14:11:12

• Hawk seaching for prey.... -Meander001- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2017 postreply 14:12:26