上下兩片都寫了眉眼,差一點進展。如上片兩行眼媚句不要,承酒而下,改成兩腮紅豔,或其他,內容會豐富些。個見。
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• 多謝曲師指點!本意是想寫欣賞美女的人喝酒,邊喝邊看邊想。不過我也覺得上下有點重複。容我再想想 -心戚然- ♂ (0 bytes) () 11/28/2016 postreply 05:54:26
• 多謝曲師指點!本意是想寫欣賞美女的人喝酒,邊喝邊看邊想。不過我也覺得上下有點重複。容我再想想 -心戚然- ♂ (0 bytes) () 11/28/2016 postreply 05:54:26
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