針尖壓水自無花 - 形象!倒瀑垂簾身影斜 - 此句 “身”字或出律,且動感不足,作“倒瀑飛身柳影斜”如何?
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• 多謝清泉兄點評鼓勵!還不能改成“飛身”,因為後麵已經有“雙飛燕”了。此處倒是用過跳水動作,感覺不合適,就改了,問好! -寒硯- ♀ (0 bytes) () 08/10/2016 postreply 19:16:17
• 多謝清泉兄點評鼓勵!還不能改成“飛身”,因為後麵已經有“雙飛燕”了。此處倒是用過跳水動作,感覺不合適,就改了,問好! -寒硯- ♀ (0 bytes) () 08/10/2016 postreply 19:16:17
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