結句或可寫的再味長一點。
籬邊叢菊爭秋色,雲外長風送雁聲 - 清麗好句。首句“暮”,“晚”略重。頸聯對句不太好,
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• 清泉兄所言極是,修改後另開一帖。 -梧桐葉- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/22/2015 postreply 17:47:13
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