尾聯之"盡綴頭”讀起來稍有不順和意味不足。
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• 再謝清泉兄點評!尾聯確如兄言,不夠理想!尚需斟酌!姑嫂明朝蝶亂頭,如何? -一劍天涯- ♂ (0 bytes) () 08/26/2015 postreply 03:59:51
• 再謝清泉兄點評!尾聯確如兄言,不夠理想!尚需斟酌!姑嫂明朝蝶亂頭,如何? -一劍天涯- ♂ (0 bytes) () 08/26/2015 postreply 03:59:51
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