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• 謝清兄點評指教,老來與親故確實對得不好,要改。用的新韻,答,足應未出律。 -wuwei09- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/06/2015 postreply 05:02:01
• 謝清兄點評指教,老來與親故確實對得不好,要改。用的新韻,答,足應未出律。 -wuwei09- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/06/2015 postreply 05:02:01
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