首聯開得好!世事何將愁裏去,勞心宜向笑中妍。亦是好聯!客夢轉空愧故園句和尾聯格律似有疏忽。
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• 謝曲師提醒!一時沒注意,孤平和出律了,兩句均已修改!問候曲師新年好! -Hope_Hope- ♂ (0 bytes) () 01/01/2015 postreply 15:31:36
• 謝曲師提醒!一時沒注意,孤平和出律了,兩句均已修改!問候曲師新年好! -Hope_Hope- ♂ (0 bytes) () 01/01/2015 postreply 15:31:36
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