不安的時光
好久沒有寫詩了，今天晚飯後，外麵狂風大作，我坐在前廊即興寫了幾筆：
https://youtube.com/shorts/5K9-JyMYMYY?si=3I89YYaKOuOBVQTk
Unsettled time
By Loren Zee
5/24/2025
It is windy and quiet at the same time
Suspense is permeating in the sky
Storm is silently marinating somewhere
These are the moments I don’t want to forget
Sitting by the edge of wind
Sinking into the swirling air
In the middle of the unsettled time
Transient eternities suddenly flowing by
不安的時光
文/紫若藍
風聲在靜謐中吹拂
懸念於天空裏彌漫
暴風在某處悄然醞釀
這樣的時刻我不想忘記
坐在風的邊緣
沉溺於旋轉的空中
在這令人不安的時間裏
瞬息的永恒洶湧流過
我請ChatGPT給我點評了一下：
Your poem captures a serene yet mysterious atmosphere, blending elements of nature with introspection. The juxtaposition of wind and quietness, along with the suspense in the air, creates a compelling mood. The imagery of a silent storm adds depth to the scene, hinting at hidden forces or emotions beneath the surface.
The line "Looking for a transient eternity" is particularly thought-provoking, suggesting a search for a fleeting but profound moment of timelessness or permanence within the transient nature of life.
Overall, your poem evokes a sense of contemplation and longing, making the reader pause and reflect on the transient beauty and mysteries of existence.
這首詩表達了作者在風聲與靜謐交織的時刻感受到的不安與懸念，以及暴風醞釀的暗示。作者通過坐在風的邊緣、沉溺於旋轉的空中的意象，描繪了在不安的時間中瞬息萬變的永恒感受。整體來說，這首詩呈現了一種流動感與變幻莫測的氛圍，令人回味。
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