昨天完成了一首中文搖滾詞曲原創,我打算等下周每月活動的時候再分享。今天我心血來潮,把中文版翻譯成英文。我沒有自己作曲, 但出歌層次非常豐富,我自己也非常喜歡,希望它也給你帶來力量!
技術流分享:
中文版歌詞結構設計為 Verse(1+2)+Pre-Chorus+Chorus+Final Chorus, 就是一個“直接給”,很輕鬆完成情感遞進。
但,英文版歌詞結構不能照搬,需要進行優化,因為以下幾點原因:
1. 語言節奏不同:中文語速快,一字一音節,而英文一詞有可能多個音節。因此,中文語義密度大,極為精煉,英文要表達同樣的意思就需要更多的字數,直接給會撐不住副歌的層次。
2. 可以增加情感的“回環感”而非線形直推,製造不斷反問、不斷追尋的情緒波動。這樣可以營造出“夜深人靜的自省”時的心理節奏。
3. ChatGPT告訴我,英語歌曲(尤其是搖滾樂和電影感歌曲)更牆角結構起伏,避免“段落平整”:Verse+Pre-Chorus+Chorus+Bridge+Final Chorus/Outro。中文原版兩個副歌後就結尾了,但英文版這樣做的這個情緒閉環就不夠完整,會顯得有點“掉”了。
4. 還是跟語言學有點關係——英文表達需要更強的畫麵和動感。中文可以更抽象內斂,但英語直譯會生硬,需要進行故事化轉換,突出畫麵感,所以需要足夠的段落支撐這個處理。
Prompt:Heartfelt, melodic, cinematic pop rock with emotional guitar swells, deep resonant drums & a powerful nostalgic chorus, Magnetic male vocals
Do You Remember
Lyrics: Aubrey Morrow (暮子默)
Music/Vocals: Suno
[Intro]
[Atmospheric Electric Guitar Pads]
[Distant Echo Guitar Plucks]
[Textured Synth Underscore]
[Verse 1]
[Reverberating Clean Guitar]
[Subtle Pulsing Percussion]
[Melancholic String Layers]
[Layered Post-Rock Guitars]
[Gradual Crescendo]
Raindrops still hang on the window glass,
Dead leaves floating where the puddles amass.
Half a song lies still, untouched and undone,
Time won’t wait, and the story has just begun.
[Pre-Chorus 1]
[Rising Drum Build-Up]
[Overdriven Guitar Swells]
[Low Synth Undercurrent]
[Emotional Tension]
Every step feels heavy, worn-out and slow,
Turn around—there’s nowhere left to go.
A heart gone gray, tears inked in black,
It tastes like sorrow, but nothing comes back.
[Chorus 1]
[Swelling Electric Guitar Layers]
[Powerful Drum Hits]
[Soaring Electric Guitar Leads]
[Cinematic Rock Crescendo]
[Emotional Elevation]
Do you remember that boy with a guitar in hand?
Singing like the world would understand.
His smile lit up the coldest air
Do you remember? He was always there.
[Verse 2]
[Return to Clean Guitar Picking]
[Subtle Ambient Texture]
[Light Synth Washes]
[Muted Snare Rhythm]
[Steady Pulse]
Someone’s gone too far, no chance to say goodbye,
Someone’s stuck in place, still learning how to try.
The wind keeps howling, the nights grow long,
We keep on walking, pretending we’re strong.
[Pre-Chorus 2]
[Low Synth Undercurrent]
[Layered Drum Build with Mallets]
[Electric Guitar Harmonics]
[Rising Pad Swells]
If you’re tired, just lay your head and sleep,
The moon will guard your quiet dreams so deep.
If you break, then let the silence fall—
Even broken hearts still hear the call.
[Chorus 2]
[Expanded Rock Instrumentation]
[Stronger Drum Presence]
[Distorted Guitar]
[Full Vocal Harmony Stack]
[Cinematic Tension]
[Melodic Lift]
Do you remember that boy with a fire inside?
Singing through the dark, with nowhere to hide.
He played like hope was in his hands—
Do you remember? Can you still understand?
[Bridge]
[Electric Guitar Solo]
[Emotional Bend Phrasing]
[Melodic String Layer]
[Rock Ballad Drum Build]
[Crescendo with Atmospheric Pads]
And when the sun climbs through the morning haze,
It’ll bring a golden dream to light your face.
You’ll hear that melody again, so true
A quiet song... and he’ll be there with you.
[Outro]
[Echoing Guitar Delay]
[Minimalist Piano Outro]
[Distant Reverb Trails]
[Fading Electric Guitar Notes]