湊熱鬧 聊翻譯 兩分錢

很同意小謝，俺趕腳翻譯不該是用另一個語言寫出譯者對詩歌的解讀，詩歌通常是一百個人一百個解讀，誰對誰錯嗎，沒有答案，通常寫詩的人有意模糊，留給讀者解讀思考的空間。所以俺趕腳翻譯詩歌，該盡量 literal ，盡量不改變詩的結構，語序，譯者把自己的解讀強加給讀者是不恰當的。比方，江雪，獨釣寒江雪，俺趕腳是全詩的精華，前麵都是鋪墊，嚴格字麵的意思俺以為是一個畫麵，老翁在獨自一人在釣寒江上的雪，而非在釣魚。小謝的翻譯傳遞了這個畫麵。這個畫麵的意思自然是大家的解讀會有種種。

比方這首詩，這句土到瓷，解讀是啥？

讀一首餘秀華的《微風從我這裏經過》

允許我沉醉，允許我哭泣，允許我在這麽遠的地方 把愛情掏出來。如掏一叢夜來香 麵臨星光的時候，麵臨深淵 我一直是個懷揣泥土的人，遇見你 它就有了瓷的模樣 卻沒有人來告訴我每一條路都是晴朗 比你易跌倒，比你易破碎 作為一個販賣月光和人間的人 我允許你，笑話我 如果哪一個早晨醒來，找不到彼此 隻有微風吹過 一定要微笑，無論記得還是遺忘

my unsuccessful attempt

A breeze bypasses me

Please allow me to indulge, to cry, to dig out my love
at such a remote place， as if I dig out a vine of Tonkin Jasmine
on a starry night， in front of an abyss.

I carry around clay to my chest. Once I meet you,
the clay turns into porcelain.
but no one tells me every road is clear.

I walk limplier than you, I break easier than you.
As a vendor of moonlight and society
I allow you, to mock me.

If we wake up one morning, we couldn’t find each other,
only a breeze blows through.
We have to smile, no matter we forget or remember.

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Skypoet40 - thank you for sharing your emotional journey. love can hurt and it can be grand but in the end it is amazing2 years ago