First Meet

First Meet 

 

Shaken by a fresh breeze of your delicate feet,

When I was immersed in the drowsy heat.

Awoken by a cooling shade of your fleeting shadow, 

When I was bound to the cuddly meadow.   

I chased your gorgeous shadow to greet,

And your beautiful smile was a wonderful treat. 

We strolled around the meadow in sunset,

Till midnight we were trapped in a love net. 

Decades later I still hear the birds’ tweet,

They witnessed a first meet ever sweet. 

 

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回複 '寒山月' 的評論 : 謝謝您的鼓勵！ 您過獎了， 不敢當。 剛剛學習的， 現在 free verse , 大概上世紀初, 我讀的都是舊體詩， 新詩不太會欣賞， 自己瞎寫時， 也都讀出來， 盡量寫到讀的順暢上口。

[寒山月]

但是你的韻律和音步掌握得很好。我也不很懂。英語新詩是從什麽時候不再強調押韻的？我有時覺得嚴格的韻律使得一首詩很沉悶，但是有韻使得詩上口。

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很慚愧， 看到你的評論後， 才去了解了 meter and rhythm。 我過去一年才開始讀詩， 手癢， 就胡寫幾句， 請多指教。

[寒山月]

Is this a Trochee or Dactyl?