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[七律]-抱病打油 步韻

(2006-04-17 20:39:44) 下一個

[七律]-抱病打油  步筐兄韻 BY 雨清

 

風寒枕熱摸燈行,

夜半黃連苦素心.

唯見月圓浮碧水,

偏餘骨瘦抱紅衾.

失眠求佛千鍾粟,

伏案翻書萬鬥金.

雲掩夢鄉和淚看,

琉璃舊瓦古飛禽.

 

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附筐兄原詩: 無病打油 BY一筐2006-04-17 18:19:48

 

雪月風花皆在意,油鹽醬醋不從心.難將苦句沽清酒,且籍纖灰典薄衾
欲笑紅塵思五鬥,唯憑幻夢散千金.鬧春重是尚書杏,伴舞長物處士禽
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Stat 回複 悄悄話 Yuqing,

How do you compare your recent poems, especially Lv Shi, to those your wrote a couple months ago? Do you see improvement? I remembered someone called you Da4 Shi4 after reading the first couple Lv Shi of yours :)

There was a question about Ze4 Yun4 Wu3 Jue2 on the forum. MengZhongNv answered that there was no such thing. I am sure many people knew it was the opposite. But they chose not to correct her.

This is my suggestion: don't try to compose fast, try to make it better instead. Refrain yourself from Da2 or He4 others since it is hard enough for you to write freely.

Good luck with writing better poems.

Sean






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