Let the Starlight Burn

Let the Starlight Burn

 

Let the starlight burn

On a dark Friday night

In my pitch black eyes

Is your secret light

 

The waving smoke twisting

At the longed-for site

I scream for the shooting star

At the forbidden height

[舞曼西樓]

金秋君，我是這把它翻成中文，也許能幫助您理解？謝謝

讓行星之光燃燒
在這黑暗的星期五晚上
在我漆黑的眼睛裏
映著你神秘的目光

蜿蜒的煙波纏綿著
那個渴望到達的地方
我在被文明禁止的高處
呼喚著那顆發射的彗星

[獨立金秋]

Thanks for your speedy answer. Maybe, I didn't state my questions clearly. I would like to know:

1. What is "the waving smoke"? What are you refering it to?

2. What is "the longed-for site"? Is it a country, place or something in your mind?

I believe that you have specific meanings for these expressions in your mind. However, it is difficult for readers to understand. That's why I have questions for you.

Still, I appreciate your poems and enjoy reading them.

Have a nice day.

[舞曼西樓]

金秋君好！您的表揚，我當之有愧。
周五沒什麽特殊的意義，一般周五is time for bad behaviors
Is用動詞會好些。比如說sparkle, twinkle...
waving smoke 指扭曲的。。。
longed-for 指渴望到達的。。。

這首詩是特指的，所以不知道所指，就比較難懂：）

[獨立金秋]

能用英文寫詩，足見舞曼的英文水平之高。 我有幾處不明白，請詩人示下。

為什麽是周五的夜晚？有特別的意義嗎？
Is your secret light 裏的 Is 如果用一個動詞是否會更好？
The waving smoke 是指什麽？
the longed-for site 又是指什麽？

別嫌我笨啊！