天方葉：English Love Song， Let Summer Freeze

Willow dancin' in the summer wind
Leaves whisper you cann't hear
As we stop by

Sweet kiss on a summer's day
Heart beats all go away
You and me high

Stars trace our dreams' way
summer night end our day
You and me fly

天方葉
June 12，2011


附：原詩（摘自林貝卡）
Song: A Summer Song
Artist: Chad & Jeremy

Trees swayin' in the summer breeze
Showin' off their silver leaves
As we walked by

Soft kisses on a summer's day
Laughing all our cares away
Just you and I

Sweet sleepy warmth of summer nights
Gazing at the distant lights
In the starry sky

[tianfangye]

謝謝tern2
1.中英雙全不敢說，隻是想嚐試一下。
2.接受你的建議把逗點兒去掉了。

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中英雙全天方君：））

每行後麵的comma去掉可能更好一點？也可以把有的逗號換成小點。這樣或許語句上更順些。

你唱的歌了不得，好唱啊！

[tern2]

中英雙全天方君：））

每行後麵的comma去掉可能更好一點？也可以把有的逗號換成小點。這樣或許語句上更順些。

你唱的歌了不得，好唱啊！

[林貝卡]

天方葉，

謝謝你聽了Chad & Jeremy演唱的《A Summer Song》後即興賦詩，我把你的《Let Summer Freeze》做成帖子了，略表謝意，連接如下：

Let Summer Freeze Author: tianfangye
http://blog.wenxuecity.com/blogview.php?date=201106&postID=10345

Have a nice week ahead,

Rebecca