Great. But there is room for improvement

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In addition to Xiaoman's:

"keep" in the first sentence is too short.curl up sounds like curled up.

These are questions: these sounds like this

Personal history's stress seems off. It seems to me it should be on "history", yours seems to be on "Per", not completely sure.