妹妹的作文
文章來源: 席琳2005-06-01 10:44:11


妹妹有點兒懶,平時不見她動筆寫東西,也不見她用功做習題。

今天是學校最後一天,發下來了作文本。不看不知道,一看嚇了我們一跳,原來厚厚的作文本,200頁,前前後後,一頁不拉,都是作文。相反,姐姐隻寫了大約120頁,而且是一半是畫,一半是作文。

姐姐在一年級,是一個好的漫畫家,字也寫得很大個,句子寫的很短,一篇作文,沒有幾個句子,功夫都在畫中。

妹妹在幼兒班,開始的作文很短,寫得不成句子。漸漸的,文章越來越長。字寫得小,能寫滿頁的字。內容還沒有細看,老婆的評語:章法雜亂。

下麵摘選幾篇:

一、開學第一篇 (8.12.04)

My name is Jackie. I like to swim。

接下來大約兩個月的時間,都象是極簡單的日記:今天星期幾,我們上什麽課,或者去幹了什麽有趣的事情,下麵是簡單的配圖。

二、火雞和他的朋友(11.03.04)

Today is Wednesday. We have computer lab.

The turkey is in the tree. He is playing in the tree. He has a friend. He isplaying with his friend.

The turkey is happy, because he has a friend.

十一月份開始寫比較完整的段落。例如升國旗呀,去動物園呀,畫畫呀,感恩節呀等有關的小故事。有時候是同樣的主題,反複的練習。十二月份,寫下雪、和自己最喜歡的東西。

三、拍老師的馬屁(11.23.04)

Today is Tuesday. We have computer lab.

This terrific Tuesday, I love my best teacher, Mrs. Morine. She is so so so so pretty. She is the best teacher. I love Mrs. Morine. I am so so happy.

象這樣的拍馬之作,不下十餘篇。老師也顯然吃這一套,高興得鼻涕泡流了一串又一串,評語也就特別好:Thank you! You are so so nice! You are one of the best students!  I think you are the best student!

四、到中國去旅行(2.3.05)

Today is Tuesday. We have music.

One day, I got to a real airplane. I got to China. It was fun and I love China.

從第二年一月十號開始,練習寫到日本去,寫總統節,寫情人節,進展不是很大。但是經過幾個月的練習,可以看出,從三月份開始,作文的句式和段落明顯的變長,逐漸的就可以敘述比較完整和複雜的故事了。

五、螃蟹的婚禮(5.18.05)

Sonewhere in the ocean there lived a crab. he lived in a cave. The cave was dark. The crab found a girl crab. He wanted to marry the girl crab. So he bought a bounch of flowers.

The crab gave (the flower to) the girl crab and said I want to marry you. The girl crab said just what am thinking. The girl crab and the boy crab loved each other. They both said let's marry each other.

They both said that word. So they married each other.

這樣看起來,妹妹在學校的進步,還真的是不小。


2005-5-31