好詩！不過兩個“乃”字用得不太好。“乃先”如改成“為先“及”乃危難時“改成”處危難時“則更好一些。

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好詩！ 不過兩個“乃”字用得不太好。“乃先”如改成“為先“及”乃危難時“改成”處危難時“則更好一些。