腿形不錯，菜色次之，英文嘛...

1.       Monotonous sentence structures.  In the short passage, at least 7 sentences have “it was…”

Well, IT WAS a bad habit.

 

I further noticed another sentence pattern – a sentence + comma + a supplementary phrase. I don’t know if this proper, but it definitely seems repetitive and predictive:)

a.       I touched down at Beijing International Airport on Saturday afternoon, more than slightly dazed for which a John Grisham novel was to blame..

b.      I felt the slight irritation in my nose and throat the minute I stepped out of the airport,

not an assuring sign for good air quality at all.

 

c.  It was a set of nice little snacks, courtesy of Marriott.. 

 

2.       Redundant expressions:

a.       It's as if the very fact of talking about allergy medication would make my wishful thinking of an allergy a fact.

àIt's as if talking about allergy medication would make my wishful thinking a fact.

b.      I felt the slight irritation in my nose and throat the minute I stepped out of the airport…

à My nose and throat felt slightly irritated in the minute I stepped out of the airport…

3.       Grammar:

a.       and only then I realized that…

è and only then did I realize that…

Don’t know how well these comments will be received. Probably I should focus on Hanhan’s writing more. Hahah~