Basicly these are nice pictures.

Western female has wide shoulder, so you are absoluctly right, an angle of shoulder is neccessary.

About your Japaness style photo, my words were cut for no reason, what I said was there is too much yellow color tone in it. These photos have no that problem.

About #2, the face and the body have different color skine tone, I met same problem when I did model shooting, I guess the problem is the face faced the dark side.

Just like you said before, there is a lot of thing to learn about model shooting, keeping going and have fun.