又改了一下 。謝謝妖妖不介意我亂改你的美詩!:)

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【To Meet You】

Spring gentle breeze, white clouds  

The seed eventually sprouts

Through the darkest time

Flying with all petals in the prime

 

Fluttering butterfly wings

Singing happily like birds

Just to meet you today

To greet you everyday

 

Note:

1) in the first verse, I got rid of the prepositional word, now there are just two noun phrases. then, it's ok without a transition word. And I also moved Spring to the first verse :)

2) In the second stanza, I reorganized the first two verses a bit to emphasize the two actions (fluttering and singing) but the rhyming is lost. To me it's worth it.