Nice! A couple of thoughts.

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1.      “I can still feel happiness”   Generally, it would make greater sense either be “feel happy” or “enjoy happiness”.


2.      “Water flows, Blossom falls, and spring goes,”  Would it give a stronger sense of helplessness by changing it to “Spring is gone, along with the flowing water and falling blossoms.” ?