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The Premier of Shu Kingdom

Where to seek for the temple of the premier?

Outside JinGuan Town with cypresses so lush.

Green grass on steps reflects the color of spring;

Orioles beyond leaves have vain sweet warbling.

Three visits to bother him for tactics in affairs under heaven;

Heart of old courtier on starting the dynasty of two generations. 

這兩句需要聯在一起吧？  平衡一下，把後麵的兩朝搬到前麵來：Two generations of the dynasty were started under  your  whole-hearted assistance   (用your 表達出詩人對蜀相的敬意）

But he died before the army gained victory,

Which makes heroes wet gown fronts with tears.  ？ （襟：lapel, turndown, turndown collar, revers)